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[repeat]Eternal eternal eternal eternal eternal [/]
Enter Drums.
'Eternal fades into inarticulate echo*

Enter Guitar.

Do you remember when
When we first spoke when
When we first met when
When we first saw ourselves

Dancing in each other's eyes..

Can you still feel that
That hand around your waist that
That cheek-to-cheek, face-to-face that
That first dance, tears/steps/lips

Dancing in each others arms..

What has not come
What has
What will, in time
Float with me, through this stream
Live our lives then
Moments

Could you taste the ending?  Breathe
Breathe in this sweet night, breathe
Breathe out your past now, breathe
Breathe in my soul, my mind, who I am(I am yours)

Together we're true and false.

Will you catch the morning light
Light up every life night light
Light the world on fire light
Light up the things that could never exist

Together we're neither true nor false.







Temper my state of mind,
Deliver my passioned cries
We're together, apart, neither, and I'm always by your side....
Listen to your funeral
And visit your conception
This is what is means to be free and trapped, both, with,
love
hope
never always
hot cold
anode cathode
left right
up down
in out
of place
emptiness
closed space
open
stuck
move still
hold let go
run fall
eat
sleep
live.......die

Words are so hard to find
To represent explain, constrain this idea, thought
This absolute
This concept
This mind-breaking, life-taking

True..false..both..neither..Catushkoti
©2005-2009 ~TheProphetBob
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I'm not sure I like this.

It's quite....thin.

Reminds me of Moby.
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oo nice use of repetition

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Heh, thanks =) TBH, I think I'm going to scrap this but re-use some of the structural ideas I developed here....maybe.


~pr0ph37~

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it reminds me a tad of we dance alone by sting. it's got that same hopeless dream-like quality to it.
very, very nicely writen :)
Nat xxx

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This is a gem. In an earlier comment, you said you might scrap this one. Do what you please, but in my opinion, this one is just so great. Theres a lot of detail, but when I read it it seems like that detail all comes together and connects like a puzzle to give this wonderful work of art. I'm gunna fav this one.
Thanks so much.....I really don't like this one now, but that may be because I've forgotten how the music goes (I almost always think in songs rather than poems, but have yet to learn how to write sheet music).

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